Date: June 20, 2007 11:07 AM Title: Utah
I loved it. Especially the little ending... everyone needs a lil Fluff now and then!
Date: January 29, 2007 2:22 AM Title: The Deal
Okay, I guess you heard it all before, but magnificent, splendid, outstanding, astonishing are just a few words that pop up in my mind after reading this.
I read it last night in one piece, way to addictive to stop! Your acute characterisation of Michael is overwhelming.
And though the open ending of chapter 19 was great, my Misa heart did secretly jump for joy you added chapter 20.
I'm actually sad this ended, would have loved to see more of it... (Linc, Sara and LJ their side of the story...sequel..NO?)
Date: January 23, 2007 11:18 PM Title: Utah
I just realized I'd never read the last parts of this and I'm so glad I found my way back. I loved this whole story. I really enjoyed the idea of how Michael would react in prison if he didn't have his plan to focus on and he had so many obstacles to deal with day to day. I think it was very true to the character we see in the show, too and the reactions were all spot on.
Date: November 23, 2006 12:24 PM Title: Utah
I'm so sad that it is over. I'll miss coming here looking for updates. I'm glad that Sara made an appearance.
Date: November 22, 2006 11:16 PM Title: Utah
Well, well, well. You're a clever one, Pemphredo. Really. You juggle with all the legal, practical and relational elements of the show with such easiness, accuracy and credibility. Good job. I will read your forthcoming pieces, be assured.
Date: November 21, 2006 2:48 PM Title: Utah
Awww!! I loved it! This was such an awesome finishing chapter.... it was just... I loved it. What else can I say? My favourite line was this: "you’re bleeding all over my floor at the moment Mr Scofield so you’re currently making a mess in my present." - brilliant line. You did such a great job, I will definitely be keeping an eye out for your future stuff!
Date: November 20, 2006 2:24 PM Title: The Tour
Just Love it!
Date: November 20, 2006 7:07 AM Title: Utah
Well I'm sitting here fingers poised but I'm so overwhelmed by it all that I'm kind of speechless!
Okay, I've found some words! I'm glad Michael didn't die. It would have been a grand and dramatic exit but...too hard to take after all he has gone through.
The sentence was fair and proper and for me had a touch of genius about it! Kudos for that!
Lincoln, all growly and frightened Michael would die, was wonderful!
As soon as I knew Michael was hurt after falling through the ceiling my brain gave me a little nudge by whispering 'Sara' in my head, but I was still pleasantly surprised when the Doc turned out to be her!!
There has been a wonderful tale! It was a brilliant plot idea and if there was any justice this should be the third season!!
As for developing your style, I could see it developing as the story progressed so I think you're well on the road to being a fabulous writer in the fandom!
Hehe!! Tearcreek! The punctuation nazi!!! Throw in grammar and spelling too! She admits to it freely!
Anyway, thank you for this story. I'm so happy that you posted it because I've thoroughly enjoyed reading it and I look forward to many more of your fabulous plots!!
*hugs*
Date: November 20, 2006 6:48 AM Title: The hospital
The suspense is killing me!! Does Michael make it or not?!!!
Tearcreek told me it was finished and posted first thing this morning! So now I've got to dash to read the last chapter!!
Still fabulous, of course!
Date: November 20, 2006 2:32 AM Title: Utah
Ah it's over, now I am sad. All right, I'll be honest, I'm not too find of the fluffy end, but I can see why you'd want a conclusion that involved Sara and Michael. Personally, I'm kind of into the angst, have been my whole life, hell my favorite book is Duras' The Lover, if that's not angst I don't know what is, so when you let them come together in an almost relaxed state it felt unnatural. These are two people who have been through a lot, together, and apart, I think things could have been a little less funny, this whole story has been very intense, so finishing this way seems kind of out of place. I applaud you though, because you finished it with integrity.
Author's Response: Hiyas RDG and thanks for such a thoughtful review. I agree in many ways that the fluffy ending was a fudge on the general angst of the rest of the story.Part of me was very tempted to let Michael die, it would have been a slightly more realsitc ending and as you said retaining the tension of the main story. However the hopeless romantic in me nudged me into adding the final chapter. Thanks for your thoughts.
Date: November 20, 2006 2:31 AM Title: The Enquiry
Magnificent so far. I do hope we get to read the contents of the letter to Warden Pope!
Date: November 19, 2006 3:49 PM Title: Utah
awww, I loved it. Thank you for entertaining me for the last little while. I'm so glad we got the mushy misa ending. :)
Date: November 19, 2006 3:07 PM Title: Utah
That was a really great ending - I loved the 'I don't think i'll ever be done cleaning you up' line - It was great :)
Date: November 19, 2006 12:46 PM Title: Utah
The epiloge was great and a much better ending that the did he die one. I'm not a big shipper but I loved this chapter, not too sweet, just perfect.
I really enjoyed this story, so please write a second one soon. Thanks.
Date: November 19, 2006 12:04 PM Title: The hospital
Thank you for updating so soon. What a great chapter. And only one more to go... *starts crying like Lincoln*
Date: November 19, 2006 10:52 AM Title: The hospital
great chapter i'm still holding out for sara to make an appearance in the last chapter too!!please update soon
Date: November 19, 2006 10:34 AM Title: The hospital
That was such a great chapter but please don't let Michael die - I'm still hoping you'll bring Sara into the story at the last minute :(
Date: November 19, 2006 10:01 AM Title: The Hearing
Oooh, you can't leave us hanging on like this! Very exciting chapter. Please, Please, PLEASE update soon. Thanks for writing this great story.
Date: November 19, 2006 9:10 AM Title: The Hearing
OMG!!! Just...I hope they've got to Michael in time!!! Now all I have to do is worry until you update again!!!
*chews finger nails anxiously*
Oh, and the way Falzone got to Michael? Very neatly done!! *chews some more*